Homecoming

Jan 3, 2016 23:29
Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.

I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.

Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.

Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.

There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.

I am a little tired today.

Good night.
帰省

今日は仕事が一段落ついたので実家に帰省しました。

夕方に家につき、甥っ子と姪っ子にお年玉として New Nintendo 3DS をプレゼントしました。

それから家族で夕飯を食べ、母と義兄とスターウォーズエピソード7を観に行きました。

実は私はエピソード4〜6を観ていなかったのですが、楽しかったです。

よくわからないところは、義兄が解説してくれました。

今日は疲れたのでもう寝ます。

おやすみなさい。
No. 1　Amanda's correction
  • Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.
  • Today, I returned home to pack up my work.
  • I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.
  • I arrived home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as a present.
    　プレゼント = present
  • Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.
  • We ate dinner, and after that my mother, my brother-in-law and I went to watch Episode 7 of Star Wars.
  • Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • I am a little tired today.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Good night.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :D
No. 2　thethinker83's correction
  • Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.
  • Today, I was returned home because I could pack up completed a (significant) phase of my work.
  • I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.
  • I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a new Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama (New Year's gifts).
    　In general, I recommend providing translations for Japanese words that might be unfamiliar to non-native speakers.
  • Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
  • Actually, my mother and I didn't watch episodes 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
  • There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.
  • There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it them to us.
    　edited for consistency in number (parts --> them)
  • I am a little tired today.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
  • Good night.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
I enjoyed the new Star Wars movie too. I watched it at the only IMAX theater with a 4K laser projector in New England. :)
kanotown
Thank you very much for the corrections and explanations! :)
Wow, the IMAX theater with a 4K laser projector sounds so fantastic. I really want to the theater someday.
thethinker83
There are only eight of these theaters in the entire world. Maybe there is one in Japan? :)
kanotown
Eight?! The number is really small... You're right, according to the Internet, one of them seems to be located in Osaka. I will visit Osaka in next September to participate in an academic conference, so I will reserve a ticket of the theater at that time, hehe.
No. 3　outdoors's correction
  • Today, I was return home because I could pack up my work.
  • Today, I was returned to my hometown because I could pack was able to finish up my work.
  • I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama.
  • I arrived at my home in the evening, and gave my nephew and niece a New Nintendo 3DS as otoshidama (new year's gift).
  • Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother and my brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.
  • Then we ate dinner, and after that, my mother (and my) brother-in-law and I went to watch Star Wars Episode 7.
  • Actually my mother and I didn't watch episode 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
  • Actually my mother and I didn't watch had never seen episodes 4, 5, and 6, but we really enjoyed it.
  • There were some difficult parts to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it to us.
  • There were some parts that were difficult to understand, but my brother-in-law explained it them to us.
  • I am a little tired today.
  • This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :D
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